Sorry for kinda stopping it randomly, but like I said in the last chapter, I want it be no more than 3 thousand words and this is already over 3,600 words. I hope you guys don’t mind. I was actually thinking about discontinuing this because I don’t have time to write new chapters on time, but to discontinue after 3 chapters would be stupid. I’m the kinda person who likes to finish what I start, so Imma keep this going until the end. And I'm still hesitant about that download button. ._. Sooooo, the main point of this chapter was to show that this kinda stuff happens outside of school too. It was actually about a year ago (Note: I was homeschooled at the time) and some kids were bothering me at a football game. But my mom was there, so she kinda saved me. But it kinda bothers me that even when I’m out of school, I still get harassed. lol Anywho, I’ve got chapter 1 of “Yogurt” up, so go check it out. I’ve also been very busy because I started a Laura Bailey fan club and I’m looking for members. If you’re a fan of Laura Bailey, come join. ;D I kinda got the idea of this chapter because my mom LOVES to plan beach trips and they’re pretty fun. Anyway, it’s storming outside so I’m gonna shut off my laptop.
This is such an amazing story so far! It brings a new scope on what Claires and Serahs life could have been like. You write just enough so it doesn't seem like the chapter is short but it still keeps the reader guessing. I haven't found a story quite like this one and I love it! It is completely original and all your own and it just has this... spark? It makes you feel like you just want to keep reading. Much like your other story Yogurt. I love how you still kept some of Lightnings anger and how she thinks with her fists rather than her head. Serah is also still the one that reminds Claire on what is right and wrong but still manages to be the fun sister she is. All in all this is such a wonderful story and I hope you choose to complete it!
I haven't found a story quite like this one and I love it! It is completely original and all your own and it just has this... spark? It makes you feel like you just want to keep reading. Much like your other story Yogurt.
I love how you still kept some of Lightnings anger and how she thinks with her fists rather than her head.
Serah is also still the one that reminds Claire on what is right and wrong but still manages to be the fun sister she is.
All in all this is such a wonderful story and I hope you choose to complete it!
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